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Again, preventative medicine is beneficial towards a higher patient survival rate, and it is also a cheaper method of treating patients. If we could prevent or detect diseases earlier than we could save lots of money. Bernard Marr’s article expresses the cost benefits to big data providing preventative medicines in health care. He says: “With the world’s population increasing and everyone living longer, models of treatment delivery are rapidly changing, and many of the decisions behind those changes are being driven by data. The drive is now to understand as much about a patient as possible, as early in their life as possible –  hopefully picking up warning signs of serious illness at an early enough stage that treatment is far more simple (and less expensive) than if it had not been spotted until later.” (Marr, 3). Preventative medicine will be cheaper in the long run because the disease will have been detected earlier making for a more thought out and early treatment plan. As previously mentioned, clinical trials can also be used to generate the big data used in preventative medicine, but they are very expensive. Junhua and Boli point it out when saying: “Nowadays, methods for post-marketing evaluation are usually intensive hospital surveillance for safety monitoring, observational study, cohort study and/or RCTs (randomized controlled trials) for efficacy assessment. These methods are all cross-sectional studies demanding large amount of investment, which are still unable to accomplish continuous monitoring and evaluation.”(Zhang, 321). Even the studies conducted for specific treatments can’t promise a sufficient or accurate outcome. Without guaranteed results the trials are too expensive to conduct. This is why it would be ideal to use patient medical records to gather the data rather than trials.

Learning Outcome 2:

I never really knew how much evidence I needed to put in my papers to make my point. I used to just put in a quote from a source and call it good but now I realize that there is so much more to do than just adding a quote. I also didn’t know that it doesn’t necessarily have to be a quote; you can also paraphrase or summarize the source as evidence. When adding evidence into the paper a lot of framing is need around the quote. Framing is adding information about the evidence and the source before and after the quote or summary or paraphrase which connects it to the rest of the paragraph and gives an explanation of how it connects to the claim. I also never knew that I was supposed to use more than one source as supporting evidence. In my big data paper I used 3 different sources as evidence. I used 2 sources as supporting evidence and one source as my naysayer. In the fourth paragraph I used 2 sources to add text-to-text connections and also because having two pieces of evidence that support the same claim is stronger than just one piece of evidence supporting that claim. Overall I have learned a lot about integrating sources into my papers in English 110.